What is something we
all look forward to? What age is so important to teenagers? What legally gives
us the “adult title”? We can all anticipate that turning 18 can answer all
these questions? So, Why is this important to many of us? What makes a
multitude of us rush life? In listening to Trace Adkins song “You’re Gonna Miss
This”, I began analyzing the meaning of this song; it sums up a great amount of
detail about wanting to growing up, and the reality of it.
Growing up to fast is
the exact focus of “You’re Gonna Miss This” by Trace Adkins. In his song he
states, “ You’re gonna miss this you’re gonna want this back, you’re gonna wish
these days hadn’t gone by so fast, these are some good times, so take a good
look around, you may not know this now, but your gonna miss this”. Who would
better know this than an adult and father that has lived/living this? These
lyrics are put together this way to emphasis the ideas of how the perspectives
of young adolescence changes when they realize what all life has in store.
These lyrics also emphasis the words “you’re gonna”, this definitely brings the
audience to relate to themselves. Well Trace Adkins is father to 5 girls; he
definitely has credibility in this song. Also when researching a survey about
kids growing up fast, 82% or people agree that kids grow up to fast, leaving
18% disagreeing (www.debate.org). This is tremendous example exemplifying what
Trace Adkins is saying in “You’re Gonna Miss This”. This survey involves adults
and adolescences themselves, with no limitations on who can vote.
Revised Paragraphs:
What is something we
all look forward to? What age is so important to teenagers? What legally gives
us the “adult title”? We can all anticipate that turning 18 can answer all
these questions. So, why is this important to many of us? What makes a
multitude of us rush life? In listening to Trace Adkins song “You’re Gonna Miss
This”, I began analyzing the meaning of this song; it sums up a great amount of
detail about wanting to growing up, and the reality of it. This song relates to
the ideas of pathos, logos and ethos. This song is one that is heard and felt
by many because the story the song portrays. This song truly holds a ton of
meaning to it. I’m sure Adkins and the other two songwriters gained popularity
by this song, because it concludes that that we need to enjoy the time we have
with our kids while we can.
The first time I heard
the song I was listening to Pandora. I was about to skip the song, but the
title caught my attention. “You’re Gonna Miss This” is the title, since I was
on a country playlist I figured it had meaning. I like others love listening to
meaningful music, so I thought I would listen. In seeing the title I’m sure
many can predict or assume what the song will be about. Some will have ideas
that are far from the meaning of what the song is about. A lot of people will
guess that it will be about something we will miss, taking the title into a
literal manner. In this case that assumption will be very accurate. The title
of the song was actually picked by, Lee Thomas, one of the songwriters. He
chose this title after, Ashley Gorely, another songwriter told him about the
idea of making a song based on an event that happened in his own life. Briefly, Gorely was getting some maintenance done to his house, the kids and family
dog kept getting in the way and his wife was apologizing several times to the
maintenance man. After this it was shared with Adkins and they formed them
song. The song is a personal song to Adkins, while publishing the song his
eldest daughter was getting married.
***The reason I edited the paragraphs the way I did was because I did not think I was giving off a clear focus. I deleted a lot of sentences from my first draft because I wanted the audience focus to be more on the song rather than on what other sources have to say. I also thought my introduction did not introduce what my paper would be about and what the song presents. At first I do not think I ever mentioned ethos, pathos, or logos. Which are 3 appeals that are very important in writing an analysis.
Your revisions look good I like the fact that you changed the lyrics to something that sums it all up in one neat package. I also liked the questions that you have included in the beginning, however I think you might have too many questions.
ReplyDeleteIn your introduction, you repeat the words "this song" quite a bit which causes your sentences to sound choppy. You should try to use different words so that the transitions from sentence to sentence sound better. I did, however, like that you mentioned ethos, pathos, and logos to let the reader know what your essay will be about.
ReplyDeleteI actually think that your previous second paragraph related more with your introduction(revised one) than the one that you redid. Although it does need more revision, I thought it provided a better analysis of the song.
It also did get confusing to me towards the end of your revised second paragraph because I did not understand the whole maintenance part. At first I thought you were going off topic but then I realized that it is relevant to the song. I remembered since we had previously discussed our songs. I think that before adding in that part you should talk about that section in the song and discuss how they connect so that others will not get confused.
Overall, you do have good pieces of writing that you can build off of as you continue to revise your essay.
I think that the changes that you have made are good. I like how you mentioned how you came across this song.
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