Monday, October 6, 2014

Revision Plan (Based on peer feedback)


The revision I am focusing on is changing my introduction. My reviewer was a little confused because of the multiple questions I asked in the beginning. I am also taking out a reference I thought was necessary. I need to add more and stay focused on the song. I am thinking about adding in the music video, to be able to describe the meaning and analysis more vivid. I need more information in regards to why the singer chose to sing the song, even though he did not right it. I plan to research if it meant anything to him, and also review his other songs in comparison of him choosing to put tis song n his album. I need to transition more smoothly to help my audience keep in focus and to perceive a more in depth meaning and understanding. Other information I need to gather is background or history of the song artist. I am also adding in some input from the song writers themselves to see how the song originated and if it had any meaning to their lives. After getting all this done I hope my paper reaches the amount required, I will look back a few times for grammar and spelling errors. Then one last final revision to make sure my audience can understand my focus.

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